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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/can-india- become-a-technology-leader/ article37991978.ece - In the intro, mention Indian leading the tech giants.
- In the body discuss the issues such as role of government, missed opportunities after economic reforms etc.
- In the suggestions, mention increasing public spending on education and R&D, focusing on electronic manufacturing, strengthening PSUs etc.
- Conclude by mentioning that the next big story about Indian prowess does not have to be from the U.S., but could come from thousands of entrepreneurs in far-flung corners of the country.
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Nandhini
Introduction is good.
You have written quite elaborately. However, focus should be more on technology sector. Agriculture, health etc can be given a passing mention.
Opportunities part is fine.
In shortcomings mention low spending on R&D, lower ranking in innovation, PSUs not performing to the potential etc
Way forward is fine, again tech part should be focused upon more. Other than improvement in above points, talk about need to ramp up electronics manufacturing etc
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Muskan
Decent attempt.
Intro is fine, can link it with current affairs by talking about appointment of Indians as head of tech giants in US.
Shortcomings mentioned are good.
In R&D you can mention low% of GDP spent. Also, lower rankings in innovation index, lesser number of patents etc can be mentioned.
Low enrollment in STEM field, lack lustre skill development etc are also good points.
Then, you can try and link it with social background (poor health outcomes, population engaged in agriculture).
Other points mentioned by you are good.
Steps taken part is good. Developments in electronics manufacturing, PLI scheme, innovation ecosystem etc can be mentioned.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂