Mentor’s Comments-
- Introduce by highlighting the issue of under investment in the Indian railways.
- Enlist the challenges faced in speedy creation of railway infrastructure.
- Mention the steps taken by the government in this regard.
- Conclude by giving a way forward.
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Priyanka
Introduction is fine, but what you are talking about in 3rd and 4th line seems to be operating ratio and not absolute losses, you can confirm that once.
In challenges faced, points about imports and investment are decent, but you have missed on some good points- problems in land acquisition causes long delays, e.g. dedicated freight corridor, less private participation (dependent on govt for spending), poor decision-making(passenger fares and viability of new trains being decided on populism rather than commercial basis), high debt servicing, unhospitable terrains in some areas, issue of law and order(Naxalism etc)- can be mentioned.
In steps taken mention of initiatives like Gati Shakti is good, you can also talk about National Rail Plan, National Infrastructure Pipeline etc.
Conclusion part is good, keep practicing. 🙂
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Karun
Introduction is fine, reasons mentioned are also decent; however first point can be framed better.. Railways was never privatized, so not clear what do you mean by that.. In fact lack of privatization, burden of all spending on government, low PPPs can be mentioned as challenges. Other points such as high operating ratio, populism etc are fine.
Further, you can add about issue of land acquisition which often causes delays in projects with cases pending in courts. Difficult terrains in some part of the country and law and order problems such as Naxalism can also be mentioned as challenges.
You have written a good number of points in steps taken, some recent ones such as PM Gati Shakti, Infrastructure pipeline and National Rail Plan are missing which can be incorporated.
Conclusion is decent.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Javed
Decent attempt.
Introduction is good, challenges have also been mentioned broadly, you can explain each point a bit, because this is a 15 marker and this part is specifically asked.
Further points like problems in land acquisition causing long delays, e.g. dedicated freight corridor, less private participation (dependent on govt for spending), high debt servicing, difficult terrains in some areas, issue of law and order(Naxalism etc)- can be mentioned.
Points about decision-making based on populism, high operating ratio are good.
Steps taken are fine, try to include some recent initiatives like PM Gati Shakti, National Infrastructure Pipeline etc
Also, write a concluding statement otherwise answer looks incomplete.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Jyoti
Introduction is fine but you can make it more concise- 2-3 lines should be enough for intro.
Challenges mentioned are good, points like poor decision-making, fiscal populism are nice.
Delays due to issues in land acquisition, high operating ratio( mention it in point about revenue expenditure), high debt servicing, difficult terrains in some areas, issue of law and order(Naxalism etc)- can also be mentioned.
Initiatives part is well written.
Try to provide a conclusion.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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