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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/reaping-indias- demographic-dividend/ article38262080.ece - In the intro, mention falling fertility and rising median age, and falling dependency ratio in India.
- In the body mention policy measures to invest more in children and adolescents, health, reducing the gender inequality in education, increasing the female workforce participation etc, addressing the diversity between the states etc.
- Conclude by mentioning the implementing policy changes before the window of opportunity closes.
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Aarti
Decent attempt.
Intro is fine, however in the next part elaborate the first statement a bit more by writing few more points like falling dependency ratio, rising median age etc.
You can use data regarding these points for value addition.
Also mention that this window of opportunity is available for a limited time as the old age population will start increasing along with increase in dependency ratio.
Opportunities part can be kept concise, use flowcharts to tackle some parts of the answer, it will improve presentation.
Next part about policy suggestions is good, you have covered many points, increasing female workforce participation and focus on health of children and adolescents can be incorporated, you can use bullet points like Health; Education; Employment; Skill Development to organize the answer better.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Alka
Good attempt. Content and presentation both are fine.
Intro is good, you can mention TFR 2.0 or 1-2 more data points, also mention that why the opportunity window is short ( growth of older population will lead to higher dependency ratio).
Suggestions are good. Points related to educating and skilling youth can also be mentioned, don’t restrict yourself to the article tagged above.
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing.
You are writing well. 🙂