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- https://www.financialexpress.
com/opinion/pain-points-in- defence-self-reliance-policy- landscape-better-than-before- but-systemic-issues-need- quick-redressal/2453513/ - In the intro, mention that sanctions on Russia and India’s dependence on it for defence procurement can pose serious challenges for India.
- In the challenges mention technology challenges, structural issues, low fund allocation, procurement challenges etc. In the policy, measures mention the Defence Acquisition Policy (DAP) 2020 and the draft Defence Production and Export Policy (DDEP) 2020, hike in FDI limit in sector etc.
- Conclude by mentioning the need for self-reliance in changing geopolitical landscape.
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Karun
Good attempt, content is good.
However, you can first mention challenges and then go to achievements as given in question.
Technological and structural issues can also be mentioned in challenges (lack of innovation, R&D).
Other points are good. Nice use of data.
In policy measures, although you have mentioned DAP, you can elaborate a bit.
Introduction-conclusion are good.
Keep practicing. Well-written. 🙂