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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/op-ed/improving- livestock-breeding/ article37060492.ece - In the intro, mention the livestock population in India.
- In the body, mention the important role played by livestock farming in augmenting the income of farmers and its potential for entrepreneurship development and job creation. In the next part, mention the various components of the changed schemes.
- Conclude by mentioning that the revised scheme of NLM coupled with the Rashtriya Gokul Mission and the Animal Husbandry Infrastructure Development Fund has the potential to dramatically enhance the productivity and traceability standards of our livestock
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Arpita
Nice attempt, you have covered most of the points. In significance, you can also mention about the help it does in sustaining small and marginal farmers having very less holdings. Rest of the points are good.
Before starting to write about Gokul mission and NLM, you can mention 1-2 points about why a need was felt for revision of these schemes. Rest of the answer is fine. Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Siddharth
Decent attempt, introduction is good, however you can also mention some data regarding livestock population of India, defining livestock becomes too basic.
Significance part is well written, mention the scope for entrepreneurship and job creation also.
While writing about the schemes, make it a bit more presentable, it seems very generic right now. You can use point wise format, mention capital subsidy amounts if possible, talk about breed multiplication farms, expected employment generation and profits can also be mentioned.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing, try to use points from above mentioned article for value addition. 🙂
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Bh Rpalli,
Nice answer, not much changes required. Introduction is good, significance is also fine. Before writing about the schemes you can mention briefly why a need for revision was felt.
Also, mention the government’s contributions in the scheme, especially capital subsidy component (mentioning figures will be a bonus but otherwise also it is an important component), also breed multiplication farms can be mentioned. Other points are fine.
Conclusion is also good.
You are writing well, keep it up. 🙂
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Nandhini,
Nice attempt, introduction is fine but it will be better if you can mention some data regarding livestock population or contribution of livestock sector to GDP.
Significance part is good, after that you can introduce Gokul Mission and NLM, and rather than having a subheading on challenges, you can put it as why need for revision was felt.
Second part is well written, not much changes required.
Conclusion is fine, you can also use Gandhian DPSP or mention animal husbandry infra fund along with these schemes for better impact.
Keep practicing. 🙂