Decent attempt. Introduction is fine.
In next part, many examples are mentioned but all are along the same tangent..historical.
You can first mention the point you want to convey, then go to examples- for examples, in first point you can start by saying- helps in fighting social evils- then give the names..
Further, you can mention these advantages of following what is right-
Helps in establishing order in the society( tolerance leads to peace & harmony)
Promotes efficiency in administration and governance ( lack of corruption)
Encourage others to follow the right (Me Too movement)
Helps avoid crisis of conscience( practicing equality will help in reducing patriarchal attitudes) etc
Other points are fine, too much space is occupied by names of reformers.. Mentioning 1-2 would be fine.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
Introduction is fine, example after that is also okay.. You can leave Aristotle after that.. As the question is what does the quote mean to YOU( not Aristotle).. Link it with current society.
Also, since the question is about ‘person’ mention some points on individual level- advantages of following what is right-
Helps in establishing order in the society( tolerance leads to peace & harmony)
Promotes efficiency in administration and governance ( lack of corruption)
Encourage others to follow the right (Me Too movement)
Helps avoid crisis of conscience( practicing equality will help in reducing patriarchal attitudes)
Removal of social evils( female infanticide, dowry, triple talaq etc- here you can give examples of Indian social reformers) etc
Finally, some points for state policy can be mentioned.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Decent attempt. Introduction is fine.
In next part, many examples are mentioned but all are along the same tangent..historical.
You can first mention the point you want to convey, then go to examples- for examples, in first point you can start by saying- helps in fighting social evils- then give the names..
Further, you can mention these advantages of following what is right-
Helps in establishing order in the society( tolerance leads to peace & harmony)
Promotes efficiency in administration and governance ( lack of corruption)
Encourage others to follow the right (Me Too movement)
Helps avoid crisis of conscience( practicing equality will help in reducing patriarchal attitudes) etc
Other points are fine, too much space is occupied by names of reformers.. Mentioning 1-2 would be fine.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Introduction is fine, example after that is also okay.. You can leave Aristotle after that.. As the question is what does the quote mean to YOU( not Aristotle).. Link it with current society.
Also, since the question is about ‘person’ mention some points on individual level- advantages of following what is right-
Helps in establishing order in the society( tolerance leads to peace & harmony)
Promotes efficiency in administration and governance ( lack of corruption)
Encourage others to follow the right (Me Too movement)
Helps avoid crisis of conscience( practicing equality will help in reducing patriarchal attitudes)
Removal of social evils( female infanticide, dowry, triple talaq etc- here you can give examples of Indian social reformers) etc
Finally, some points for state policy can be mentioned.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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