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- Briefly, introduce the philosophy of Sarvodaya.
- Bring out the different aspects of the concept of Sarvodaya.
- Give examples from the life of Acharya Vinoba Bhave.
- Conclude accordingly.
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Mentor’s Comments-
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Arifa
Your understanding is good, but content is a bit short.
Intro(first para) is fine. Second para has nothing substantial, can be avoided, sarvodaya means upliftment of all sections and in all aspects- so can’t focus on just women or it doesn’t mean becoming a Goddess or a ruler.
Next, mention of Gandhiji is good, you should mention some other personalities too- John Ruskin’s central teachings enlisted in his book titled ‘Unto This Last’ that were adopted by Gandhiji to build his conception of Sarvodaya; Tolstoy’s simplicity of life and purity of purpose deeply influenced Gandhi’s conception of Sarvodaya; Thoreau, held the view that democracy can be realised only in a stateless society and that government is best which governs the least ; Vinoba Bhave aimed to establish a casteless, classless and stateless society based on love and non-violence- launched the Bhoodan movement through people’s participation rather than through government legislation;
Sampoorna Kranti concept of Jayaprakash Narayan also dwells in the concept of Sarvodaya.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Karun
Good attempt.
Mention of personalities is good, especially about Gandhiji, Vinoba Bhave etc
You can also mention about John Ruskin’s book ‘Unto the last’ from where Gandhiji got inspired, also Tolstoy can be mentioned, his simplicity of life and purity of purpose deeply influenced Gandhi’s conception of Sarvodaya; sampoorna kranti of JP can also be mentioned, sarvodaya was the goal.
In intro, explain a bit more about Sarvodaya- welfare of all living beings in all aspects-physical, emotional, economic etc
Conclusion is good.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Sairam,
Please mention your reference ID. Very good attempt.
Introduction is fine, mention of Gandhiji and Ruskin is good. You can mention Ruskin’s book name ‘Unto the last’. Principles have also been explained well but you should try to keep it concise, answer has become lengthy.
Examples from lives of personalities are good, you can also mention some from other countries – Tolstoy’s simplicity of life and purity of purpose deeply influenced Gandhi’s conception of Sarvodaya; Thoreau, held the view that democracy can be realised only in a stateless society and that government is best which governs the least.
Conclusion is also good, keep practicing. 🙂
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Anoop
Decent attempt.
Intro is fine, however don’t restrict the scope of your answer to India, John Ruskin’s central teachings enlisted in his book titled ‘Unto This Last’ that were adopted by Gandhiji to build his conception of Sarvodaya; Tolstoy’s simplicity of life and purity of purpose which deeply influenced Gandhi’s conception of Sarvodaya; Thoreau’s view that democracy can be realised only in a stateless society and that government is best which governs the least- all can be mentioned.
You have explained Sarvodaya well, examples of Vinoba Bhave, JP and Gandhiji are good too.
Conclusion is fine. Some recent schemes to eradicate social inequalities can also be mentioned to link it with current affairs.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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Alka
Nice attempt.
Introduction is good, after that you can briefly explain some of the features of Sarvodaya- principle of love, tolerance, sacrifice; dignity of labour, welfare of all rather than individual upliftment etc
Mention about personalities part is good, nice examples have been mentioned.
Conclusion is fine. Some recent schemes to eradicate social inequalities can also be mentioned to link it with current affairs.
Keep practicing. 🙂
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