Q.4) India is world’s largest democracy. In democracy, elections provide an opportunity to ascertain the popular will in regard to the governance of the country. Election is the act of choosing an individual usually for holding public office through free will of the people in a representative democracy. India opted for universal adult franchise. There were many questions raised about efficacy of this that how illiterate people will be able to use vote which is a rational exercise. There was fear that corrupt practices along with misuse of money and muscle power will crave in which will be used to manipulate and sway the popular will in election. Over the years this fear has been proven right by increase number of criminal in politics, issue of capturing of huge amount of illegal money during election and rising cost of elections India .The growing greed for power has turned a sacrosanct activity into a showcase for power and a festival of corruption. In one such case of ongoing election in state assembly it was found that an EVM used for election is found in car of one political party’s member after election is over in the constituency xyz. This has raised issues rigging of election and question on impartiality of election commission of India. Other parties in state has taken this issue to social media and demanding re-election in the entire state which is a costly exercise. There are election scheduled for other states assembly in next month. (a). What are the Ethical issues involved in the above case? (b). Should india reconsider its decision of universal adult franchise and give voting right based on some qualification which include paying taxes , literacy etc. (c). What steps you would suggest so that election again become a festival of democracy in spirit and letter. (20 Marks)
Vishal
It’s good that you Started case study with brief introduction also identified skate holders.
But you have taken a very narrow approach towards the case study. It’s not just role of ECI or rigging of election rather it concerns with whole democracy.
This narrow consideration being reflected under all your answer.
A. You have identified issues but write in terms broader values like your point 4 such as unholy Nexus between politicians-bureaucracy-criminals
Decline of values in Politics, political impartiality etc.
B. First three points are the reason cited in the case study for such qualified voting right at the first place.
Rather you have to write points like article 14 equality; rationality, integrity and honesty doesn’t come just by education, it comes to people who believe in them Etc.
C. Your focus remained here like paper 2.
Again more broader suggestions should be given like internal political democracy, increased equal and empowered women participation, upholding independence and autonomy of public institutions, transparent funding Etc.
Try to write relevant ethical terms Where ever possible.
You have written fine but If you had taken the broader perspective your would have been better.
Mradul,
Your introductory write up is good.
A. Here you can add ethical issue like trust of the people being diminished, unholy nexus between politicians- bureaucracy-criminals,
Declining values in politics, lack of political neutrality in public servants .
Must write in broadest possible way with using terms of ethics paper 4.
B. This part is Written very well here you can add arguments like it is against the constitutional Morality and equality being promoted by article 14. Will create another class differentiation among citizens, will affect unity and integrity of India
C. Here you need to suggest steps keeping in mind ethics paper. Your suggestions both are narrow and tilted towards paper 2.
Add broad suggestion covering political parties, Judiciary, public institutions, public servants but with values of paper 4 in mind.
Shivanshu,
If time permits Always try to open your answer with some introduction to the case study.
Here you can also write facts of the case or identify stakeholders- identification will help you when you give solutions/suggestions. This will help in addressing all the concerns related to various stakeholders.
A. You have covered almost all the issue here still can issues Add ethical issue like diminishing trust of the people, nexus between politicians- bureaucracy-criminals, lack of political neutrality in public servants .
B. This part is Written well but you must write points with clear meaning, it’s hard to comprehend what you want to express in point 3 also first point Should be equal representation, proper presentation have different meaning altogether.
Add points like how it’s amount to discrimination ; rationality, integrity and honesty doesn’t come just by education, it comes to people who believe in them Etc.
C. Mind that suggestions being ask for a paper 4 question not paper 2. your suggestions are mostly externally enforced . Suggestions must focus on promotion of internal adherence and enforcement of the values.
So You need to write more value centric and broader suggestions equal and empowered women participation, upholding independence and autonomy of public institutions, transparent funding Etc.
You need to sprinkle relevant ethical terms Where ever possible.
Always write conclusion to the answer.
Your introduction to the case Study is fine.
But you have taken a very narrow perspective of case this is being reflected in all the answers.
A. There are various other ethical issues involve in the case other than just criminalization of Politics.
Like diminishing Trust of the people, wastage of public money, accountability of public institution, democratic spirit itself declining.
B. You have written this question better than first still need to deeper into the discussion and bring out the aspects like discrimination; Constitutional Morality; and rationality, integrity and honesty doesn’t come just by education, it comes to people who believe in them Etc.
C. Again a very narrow approach you have taken in this answer. More than half page you have taken to write what steps Govt took rather you should come directly on suggestions.
Diversify your suggestions covering political parties, public institution, judiciary, public servants, public at large etc.
For suggestions or solution always try to identify agents/stakeholders in the case this will help you in giving more broad based suggestion concerning all the possible Aspects.
Sumita,
Always try to open your answer with some small introductory write up if time permits.
A. You have identified various ethical Issues but the way they are being mentioned it’s not clear. Rather you can just list them down with clear expression
B. It’s good that you have taken a categorical stand but you have to give more ethical reasoning for your stand like discrimination, inequality, being literate doesn’t mean Honest and rational Outlook etc.
C. In this section again your points are like you’d write in paper 2. Almost all suggestions are externally enforced.
For change not only a good law is needed but also willingness of people to be law-abiding. So focus more on suggestions that promotes internally enforced mechanisms like improved democratic practices at party level, transparency in finding by Suo Moto disclosure promotion, proactive role of Judiciary etc.
You have fine writing skills just try think more on the lines of paper 4.
Keep writing 🙂
Intro you have written is but you have taken a narrow view of the case study and focused primarily on the election Aspect
A. You should have written ethical issues faced by Indian democracy overall, election of which just one Aspect. Try to write it in broader perspective.
B. You have written is part well nothing much to suggestion just try to add ethical terms in your answer.
C. Again that narrow view being reflected in this section. Suggestions are dominated by the perspective of paper 2 that is focused more on legal aspect lesser on ethical Aspect.
Try to give suggestions which are more closely related to paper 4 for this you just have to mold your arguments and show ethical values involved.
Also try to keep in mind the stakeholders that you have identified and suggestion address concerns of all the stakeholders.
You have good basic understand just put more focus on Ethical perspective, keep writing 🙂
Your introduction needs to be as broad as the scope of case study.
Other wise way to open case study is fine
A. You have identified ethical issues but you need to mold Arguments so to make them more broad.
based.
B. In section of this nature you must take a stand right at the beginning of answer, as even thinking of consideration of qualified suffrage would be betrayed to the national aspirations.
Also give more ethics based arguments like Constitutional Morality, equality, honesty integrity not being limited to literature and tax payers Etc.
C. Try to write more ethics based suggestions like promotion of values like transparency in the working of political parties, strengthening of political neutrality among public servants by enforcing code of Ethics etc.
So more focus should be on paper 4 i.e. ethics based suggestions.
Conclusion is good.
Try to inculcate suggestions given. Keep writing:)
Overall you have written very good answers addressing all the requirements of the case study.
However there are few suggestions-
Try to write introduction to the case Study as broad as its scope.
You can avoid sections like values involved when the question demands you to write them explicitly. It avoids repetition.
Take clear stand at the start of the answer, than justify, especially in questions like this where stand to take is so apparent.
First thing you need to understand that this is ethics Paper not paper 2.
Introduction you could’ve briefly talked about diminished democratic values in India.
What you have written on first page doesn’t address the demand of the question. It could be avoided mostly if not totally.
A. In first question you had to write Ethical issues like shaken trust of the people in democratic process, tarnished images of public institutions like ECI, unholy nexus between politicians-bureaucracy-criminals etc.
B. Your stand is correct, but you have to justify it with more ethics based arguments, like promotion of equality, constitutional Morality, human dignity involved in choosing the rulers etc.
C. Except first point all other suggestions are external enforcement, see laws are already there but abiding law is an issue India. So you need to Suggest ways based on ethics that promotes internal check on such Practices.
Try to think on the lines of ethics, take terms given in syllabus and try to relate them with the case Study. Than in your answer bring out them.
Vishnu,
well try however you have certain areas to improve –
1. In first part of question you have mention only one ethical issue and over explained it. Rather try to give atleast 2-3 different ethical dimensions and explain them with concise words.
2. In 2nd part of the answer, you have not understood what was asked properly. You have to give arguments whether voting right can be made qualified. There is no need to write down history of it that to for whole page in paper 4. Also, you have given contradictory statements. Once you have written allow voting based on qualifications and then denied it in next paragraph. Avoid it.
3. In last part of question try to add some ethical oriented points. For this use the words given in UPSC syllabus.
4. Always write conclusion. It is important part of the answer.
Read answers written by fellow aspirants. Keep writing 🙂
6.5/10
Some points that you can keep in mind to improve further –
1. shorten your introduction a little bit. Quotations are good. But if you are able to contextualize them in your answer, that would be better.
2. In 2nd part of your answer you have focused entirely on literacy part. Discuss other dimension too like taxation, property etc. Also, use more of ethical words like against human dignity, right to equality etc.
What you have written in introduction is not suited for paper 4. It is good for paper 2 but not to be written in ethics paper. Same is with 2nd paragraph, it was not asked what happened on that particular day or incident. It’s good you know but it was not asked.
What you have written on first page can altogether be avoided.
In ethical issues you can add points of political parties involvement in unethical activities, people’s voting based on narrow interest etc.
In 2nd part of your answer (b) you can add some points on line of – democracy in itself mean everyone, right to equality, justice etc
In 3rd part of answer (c)add some ethical arguments too – on lines like code of ethics for legislators.
Vivek,
You Started answer with good introduction. But there are Following issues
1. In first question you have taken a narrow approach except one all points are focused on even incident. Try to write Ethical Issues as broad as the scope of the case study.
Also priority of the points are also important, so write more important points first.
2. In second you have taken a right stand but add more arguments in favour like equality, Honesty rationality are virtues not limited to Educated tax payers only.
3. In last section though you focused on most important aspect of democracy i.e. The People but there are other parts also that you should have talked about like Political parties, Institutions, public servants etc.
You understanding of case Study is good. Keep writing you’ll do better gradually 🙂
If time permits try to write a brief introduction to the case study summing up your understanding of the case.
Following observations will help you improve:
1. First you have written fine, but try identify all the ethical issues of the case. you can add more points like unholy criminal-politicians Nexus, lack of neutrality among public servants Etc.
2. In second, your stand is correct but you need to make your stand with more ethics based arguments.
Like Equality among citizens, Constitutional Morality, honesty and rationality are not limited to educated and tax paying individuals.
3. You have written this part more like paper 2, you need to focus on arguments based on paper 4.
Like ensuring, strengthening values neutrality among civil servants by enacting a code of ethics, independence and autonomy of public institutions, generating awareness among citizen to deepen their faith in democracy, transparency in functioning of political parties etc.
You have good understanding of ethical issue but there is scope of improvement. Keep writing you’ll do better gradually 🙂
You have written well.
However try to work upon following aspects:
1. Introduction should be such which sums up your understanding of the case. Writing a fact or example is not enough. your intro suited for paper 2 not paper 4.
First answer is written fine
2. Arguments in second answer could have been arranged better. Here you have also written what you should written in intro also repeated in 3rd answer.
So try to stick to the what is asked, don’t waste space on creating a dramatic environment.
First take a stand and then prove it more ethics backed arguments thats it.
3. You have given wholistic suggestions there but try to back them with Ethics as again it is paper 4 not 2. For that use the relevant ethical terms, Wherever you can, mentioned in syllabus.
You have good understanding and way of expression is also fine. Try to implement above suggestions.
You can better, Keep writing 🙂
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Vishal
It’s good that you Started case study with brief introduction also identified skate holders.
But you have taken a very narrow approach towards the case study. It’s not just role of ECI or rigging of election rather it concerns with whole democracy.
This narrow consideration being reflected under all your answer.
A. You have identified issues but write in terms broader values like your point 4 such as unholy Nexus between politicians-bureaucracy-criminals
Decline of values in Politics, political impartiality etc.
B. First three points are the reason cited in the case study for such qualified voting right at the first place.
Rather you have to write points like article 14 equality; rationality, integrity and honesty doesn’t come just by education, it comes to people who believe in them Etc.
C. Your focus remained here like paper 2.
Again more broader suggestions should be given like internal political democracy, increased equal and empowered women participation, upholding independence and autonomy of public institutions, transparent funding Etc.
Try to write relevant ethical terms Where ever possible.
You have written fine but If you had taken the broader perspective your would have been better.
Keep writing 🙂
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4th page-
previous one was unclear, apologies for multiple posts.
Mradul,
Your introductory write up is good.
A. Here you can add ethical issue like trust of the people being diminished, unholy nexus between politicians- bureaucracy-criminals,
Declining values in politics, lack of political neutrality in public servants .
Must write in broadest possible way with using terms of ethics paper 4.
B. This part is Written very well here you can add arguments like it is against the constitutional Morality and equality being promoted by article 14. Will create another class differentiation among citizens, will affect unity and integrity of India
C. Here you need to suggest steps keeping in mind ethics paper. Your suggestions both are narrow and tilted towards paper 2.
Add broad suggestion covering political parties, Judiciary, public institutions, public servants but with values of paper 4 in mind.
Overall it was a good Attempt.
Keep writing 🙂
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Shivanshu,
If time permits Always try to open your answer with some introduction to the case study.
Here you can also write facts of the case or identify stakeholders- identification will help you when you give solutions/suggestions. This will help in addressing all the concerns related to various stakeholders.
A. You have covered almost all the issue here still can issues Add ethical issue like diminishing trust of the people, nexus between politicians- bureaucracy-criminals, lack of political neutrality in public servants .
B. This part is Written well but you must write points with clear meaning, it’s hard to comprehend what you want to express in point 3 also first point Should be equal representation, proper presentation have different meaning altogether.
Add points like how it’s amount to discrimination ; rationality, integrity and honesty doesn’t come just by education, it comes to people who believe in them Etc.
C. Mind that suggestions being ask for a paper 4 question not paper 2. your suggestions are mostly externally enforced . Suggestions must focus on promotion of internal adherence and enforcement of the values.
So You need to write more value centric and broader suggestions equal and empowered women participation, upholding independence and autonomy of public institutions, transparent funding Etc.
You need to sprinkle relevant ethical terms Where ever possible.
Always write conclusion to the answer.
Overall its fine. Keep writing 🙂
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Murari,
Your introduction to the case Study is fine.
But you have taken a very narrow perspective of case this is being reflected in all the answers.
A. There are various other ethical issues involve in the case other than just criminalization of Politics.
Like diminishing Trust of the people, wastage of public money, accountability of public institution, democratic spirit itself declining.
B. You have written this question better than first still need to deeper into the discussion and bring out the aspects like discrimination; Constitutional Morality; and rationality, integrity and honesty doesn’t come just by education, it comes to people who believe in them Etc.
C. Again a very narrow approach you have taken in this answer. More than half page you have taken to write what steps Govt took rather you should come directly on suggestions.
Diversify your suggestions covering political parties, public institution, judiciary, public servants, public at large etc.
For suggestions or solution always try to identify agents/stakeholders in the case this will help you in giving more broad based suggestion concerning all the possible Aspects.
Read others’ answers as well.
Keep writing 🙂
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Sumita,
Always try to open your answer with some small introductory write up if time permits.
A. You have identified various ethical Issues but the way they are being mentioned it’s not clear. Rather you can just list them down with clear expression
B. It’s good that you have taken a categorical stand but you have to give more ethical reasoning for your stand like discrimination, inequality, being literate doesn’t mean Honest and rational Outlook etc.
C. In this section again your points are like you’d write in paper 2. Almost all suggestions are externally enforced.
For change not only a good law is needed but also willingness of people to be law-abiding. So focus more on suggestions that promotes internally enforced mechanisms like improved democratic practices at party level, transparency in finding by Suo Moto disclosure promotion, proactive role of Judiciary etc.
You have fine writing skills just try think more on the lines of paper 4.
Keep writing 🙂
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4th page
Kartikeya,
Intro you have written is but you have taken a narrow view of the case study and focused primarily on the election Aspect
A. You should have written ethical issues faced by Indian democracy overall, election of which just one Aspect. Try to write it in broader perspective.
B. You have written is part well nothing much to suggestion just try to add ethical terms in your answer.
C. Again that narrow view being reflected in this section. Suggestions are dominated by the perspective of paper 2 that is focused more on legal aspect lesser on ethical Aspect.
Try to give suggestions which are more closely related to paper 4 for this you just have to mold your arguments and show ethical values involved.
Also try to keep in mind the stakeholders that you have identified and suggestion address concerns of all the stakeholders.
You have good basic understand just put more focus on Ethical perspective, keep writing 🙂
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4&5 page
Aabha ,
Your introduction needs to be as broad as the scope of case study.
Other wise way to open case study is fine
A. You have identified ethical issues but you need to mold Arguments so to make them more broad.
based.
B. In section of this nature you must take a stand right at the beginning of answer, as even thinking of consideration of qualified suffrage would be betrayed to the national aspirations.
Also give more ethics based arguments like Constitutional Morality, equality, honesty integrity not being limited to literature and tax payers Etc.
C. Try to write more ethics based suggestions like promotion of values like transparency in the working of political parties, strengthening of political neutrality among public servants by enforcing code of Ethics etc.
So more focus should be on paper 4 i.e. ethics based suggestions.
Conclusion is good.
Try to inculcate suggestions given. Keep writing:)
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4th and 5th page
Yash,
Overall you have written very good answers addressing all the requirements of the case study.
However there are few suggestions-
Try to write introduction to the case Study as broad as its scope.
You can avoid sections like values involved when the question demands you to write them explicitly. It avoids repetition.
Take clear stand at the start of the answer, than justify, especially in questions like this where stand to take is so apparent.
Rest you have written very well.
Keep writing 🙂
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First two pages
Deepika,
First thing you need to understand that this is ethics Paper not paper 2.
Introduction you could’ve briefly talked about diminished democratic values in India.
What you have written on first page doesn’t address the demand of the question. It could be avoided mostly if not totally.
A. In first question you had to write Ethical issues like shaken trust of the people in democratic process, tarnished images of public institutions like ECI, unholy nexus between politicians-bureaucracy-criminals etc.
B. Your stand is correct, but you have to justify it with more ethics based arguments, like promotion of equality, constitutional Morality, human dignity involved in choosing the rulers etc.
C. Except first point all other suggestions are external enforcement, see laws are already there but abiding law is an issue India. So you need to Suggest ways based on ethics that promotes internal check on such Practices.
Try to think on the lines of ethics, take terms given in syllabus and try to relate them with the case Study. Than in your answer bring out them.
Read others’ answers as well. Keep writing:)
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3rd page
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Vishnu,
well try however you have certain areas to improve –
1. In first part of question you have mention only one ethical issue and over explained it. Rather try to give atleast 2-3 different ethical dimensions and explain them with concise words.
2. In 2nd part of the answer, you have not understood what was asked properly. You have to give arguments whether voting right can be made qualified. There is no need to write down history of it that to for whole page in paper 4. Also, you have given contradictory statements. Once you have written allow voting based on qualifications and then denied it in next paragraph. Avoid it.
3. In last part of question try to add some ethical oriented points. For this use the words given in UPSC syllabus.
4. Always write conclusion. It is important part of the answer.
Read answers written by fellow aspirants. Keep writing 🙂
6.5/10
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Rajlaxmi,
You have attempted well.
Some points that you can keep in mind to improve further –
1. shorten your introduction a little bit. Quotations are good. But if you are able to contextualize them in your answer, that would be better.
2. In 2nd part of your answer you have focused entirely on literacy part. Discuss other dimension too like taxation, property etc. Also, use more of ethical words like against human dignity, right to equality etc.
Rest is good.
Keep writing to improve further 🙂
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Ankita,
What you have written in introduction is not suited for paper 4. It is good for paper 2 but not to be written in ethics paper. Same is with 2nd paragraph, it was not asked what happened on that particular day or incident. It’s good you know but it was not asked.
What you have written on first page can altogether be avoided.
In ethical issues you can add points of political parties involvement in unethical activities, people’s voting based on narrow interest etc.
In 2nd part of your answer (b) you can add some points on line of – democracy in itself mean everyone, right to equality, justice etc
In 3rd part of answer (c)add some ethical arguments too – on lines like code of ethics for legislators.
Keep writing to improve further
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Vivek,
You Started answer with good introduction. But there are Following issues
1. In first question you have taken a narrow approach except one all points are focused on even incident. Try to write Ethical Issues as broad as the scope of the case study.
Also priority of the points are also important, so write more important points first.
2. In second you have taken a right stand but add more arguments in favour like equality, Honesty rationality are virtues not limited to Educated tax payers only.
3. In last section though you focused on most important aspect of democracy i.e. The People but there are other parts also that you should have talked about like Political parties, Institutions, public servants etc.
You understanding of case Study is good. Keep writing you’ll do better gradually 🙂
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Harsha,
If time permits try to write a brief introduction to the case study summing up your understanding of the case.
Following observations will help you improve:
1. First you have written fine, but try identify all the ethical issues of the case. you can add more points like unholy criminal-politicians Nexus, lack of neutrality among public servants Etc.
2. In second, your stand is correct but you need to make your stand with more ethics based arguments.
Like Equality among citizens, Constitutional Morality, honesty and rationality are not limited to educated and tax paying individuals.
3. You have written this part more like paper 2, you need to focus on arguments based on paper 4.
Like ensuring, strengthening values neutrality among civil servants by enacting a code of ethics, independence and autonomy of public institutions, generating awareness among citizen to deepen their faith in democracy, transparency in functioning of political parties etc.
You have good understanding of ethical issue but there is scope of improvement. Keep writing you’ll do better gradually 🙂
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Sakshi
You have written well.
However try to work upon following aspects:
1. Introduction should be such which sums up your understanding of the case. Writing a fact or example is not enough. your intro suited for paper 2 not paper 4.
First answer is written fine
2. Arguments in second answer could have been arranged better. Here you have also written what you should written in intro also repeated in 3rd answer.
So try to stick to the what is asked, don’t waste space on creating a dramatic environment.
First take a stand and then prove it more ethics backed arguments thats it.
3. You have given wholistic suggestions there but try to back them with Ethics as again it is paper 4 not 2. For that use the relevant ethical terms, Wherever you can, mentioned in syllabus.
You have good understanding and way of expression is also fine. Try to implement above suggestions.
You can better, Keep writing 🙂
9.5/20
1st and 2nd page