Q.4) Today we live in the world of social media. In this age the question of individual privacy has gained utmost importance. Various social media platforms has declared individual privacy as the centre of their policies and has focused on end to end encryption. This focus on privacy at times exploited anti-social elements to arrange funds for their activities or promote their agenda beyond the eyes of law enforcement agencies. Consequently there is a tussle between sovereign governments on one hand and social media platforms on other. For social media platforms the end user is all that matters and their privacy is of utmost important. While, for government to perform its sovereign functions some knowledge of peoples activities on social media platforms is must. (a). What are the Ethical issues involved in this case? (b). In your opinion what should be focused- individual privacy or sovereign functions? (c). What do you think should be the main provision of Government’s social media policy? (20 marks
You need not to write whole question. Just leave the space and start ans directly.
Introduction of the case study Should give a glimpse to the issue raise. Here you could’ve raise running tussle between Twitter, WhatsApp and The Govt.
1. You have covered many issues but try to write in a way that looks more relatable to the case like
Govt. Control over Social Media with regards to Nation security Vs Fear of Surveillance State
National Sovereignty Vs policies of multinational social media firms
2. In this part question doesn’t ask you to write merit and demerit.
Better to take a stand and justify with various arguments.
Be clear with balanced approach
Individual privacy is very essential for human dignity, however the role of sovereign Nations authority to ensure the protection of rights of all by is institutionalizing legitimate use of social media without any discrimination so in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to right to privacy but instead supports it.
3. This section is written fine but points are Intermix. Write points related to one stakeholders say Govt. at one place then write other.
Here you can cite facts such as New Data Regulation of EU etc.
Conclusion is missing. Always conclude your answer.
Introduction and conclusion are fine.
However there are following issues-
1. Raise issues which are more close to the case such as
People’s right to privacy Vs Govt’s responsibly to protect rights of all,
Govt. Control over Social Media with regards to Nation security Vs Fear of Surveillance State,
National Sovereignty Vs policies of multinational social media firms etc.
2. Here you need to take a stand, and use argument to justify. Both issues are interrelated hence asked in the case. Can’t be separated.
Right to privacy like all other FR is not absolute. In the name of privacy rights Misuse of social media can not be allowed, which leads to infringement of right of others (protection of which is responsibility of the Govt).
so in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to right to privacy but instead supports it.
3. Add more points here like clear guidelines when and with what authority data can be shared,
Grievance redressal mechanisms,
Specific provisions for social media platforms to a principles of equality.
You have enough understanding. Just be more diverse and clear with your arugments.
Your Introduction is fine. Conclusion can Written better. It’s not paper 2, write your conclusion with ethical backing in your arugments.
1. You need to write values clearly.
Ethical issues will look like issue when you present them in that way. Relate your points with the case.
Add here issues like
People rights to privacy vis-à-vis government need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Need of oversight over social media platform for National security vis-à-vis fear of a surveillance state etc
2. Your stand is right but use more moving arguments for it.
Individual privacy is very essential for human dignity, it can’t be an absolute right.
In name of privacy no individual can’t be allowed to infringe on others’ right e.g. terrorists, money launderers, rapists etc. can’t claim right of privacy on their social media.
Here comes the role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all.
So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to privacy, but instead, supports it.
3. Add more specific points here like Policy should be consent oriented like EU’ Data Regulation Act,
Clear mechanism should be established vis-a-vis sharing of data with law enforcement agencies,
Grievance redressal mechanical etc.
Govt make a law for all whether private or public, if private company doesn’t adhere to the law of the land Govt have all the authority to make it compalint. This is happening in Twitter case also.
Write brief intro to case Study, here you can highlight the current tussle between the Govt and Twitter.
1. You have to write more Issues here.
Individual’s right to privacy Vs Govt’s responsibility to ensure of rights of all,
Access to data to the Govt Vs Fear of Orwellian state,
Multinational Media firms citing rule as customer protection Vs Sovereignty of a nation etc.
2. Take a more clear stand here. In normalcy right to privacy should be give utmost importance however for safety and security of the nation and People rights of sovereign democratic Govt over data, with clear adherence transparent mechanisms, should take precedence over individual’s right to privacy.
With due checks Right of the Govt essentially Supports the enjoyment of rights by the individual.
3. Here you had to write provisions that should be in the policy. Not What Govt should do. Use points like consent oriented provision as in EU’ Data Regulation Act,
Specific detailed provisions for related to data Sharing with security agencies ,
the specific about the ways to use this information. Etc.
Be more specific and diverse in Arguments. Use facts to support arguments.
Your Introduction is very well Written.
Each section Attempted well. You have understanding of the issue.
Just improve your presentation a bit. With clear spacing and use of headings.
Also when you’re asked to suggest something like the last question you must cover all the skate holders in it. It would make answer wholistic.
Like for public- consent oriented data sharing and Grievance redressal mechanism is important.
Introduction can be Written much better. It would be better if you can summarize the whole case with some current example.
1. Here you can add more Issues like privacy of an individual Vs Govt’s responsibility to ensure protection of rights of all,
National security,
Multinational companies policies Vs Sovereignty of a nation etc.
2. This section is written good though more clear stand can be taken.
3. Here you didn’t ask to write about the nature of the policy how it should be. Rather you had to write specific provisions. Use your paper 2 knowledge here.
Like Consent Oriented regulation as EU’s Data Regulation Act.
Clear mechanisms about sharing of Data with law enforcement agency,
Establishing grievance redressal institution etc.
You need to go a step further in the discussion. You have clear understanding about the issue. Use your factual knowledge specially for questions like 2 and 3 of this case study.
You have good understanding of currently ongoing Tussle between Twitter with government as it’s being reflected in your answer too much.
In intro you must give summary of the case and then use issue like Twitter as passing reference.
1. You need to add more issues here like national security, Sovereignty of a nation, fear of Surveillance state etc
2. Again Twitter issue is dominating here. Be more broad in your approach. Your stand is right but try to make it more direct and clear.
Use write up written after ethical Issues in question a, for this section.
3. Last question is written fine. Just try to cover all the stakeholders you have identified in the answer.
Write an introduction with summarizing the case as per your understanding.
1. added More ethical issues like People rights to privacy vis-à-vis government need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Governments access to data from social media platform vs fear of a surveillance state.
Issue of national sovereignty where social media platform prefer their over own community guidelines than laws of the land.
b) you need to take a clear stand here.
Individual privacy is very essential for human dignity but like other rights, it can’t be an absolute right. In name of privacy no individual can’t be allowed to infringe on others’ right e.g. terrorists, money launderers, rapists etc. can’t claim right of privacy on their social media interactions which was used to commit that crime.
The role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all. It’s must have access to data for this purpose
So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to
privacy, but instead, supports it.
c) Question doesn’t ask you to write what should be the nature rather ask you what should be the provision of Governments Social Media Policy could involve-
Focus on consent oriented use of data as is done in EU under new Data Regulation
Act.
Detailed and clear mechanism for data with security agencies with
the specific mandate of ways to use this information.
Setting up the institution that hear complaints of the individuals against content or
policies of social media platform etc.
Always conclude your answer.
Introduction can be Written much better. At present form it’s fails in conveying your understanding of the issue clearly.
1. Taking information and surveillance are two different thing can not be equated like you did.
You need to add issues like
Right to privacy Vs Govt’s responsibility to protect those rights from infringement.
Free access to data Vs fear of Surveillance State,
Companies Private policies Vs non compliance with law of the land challenging Sovereignty of the nation etc.
2. This section is written fine. You can end this section with arguement that sincethe role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all. So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to
privacy, but instead, supports it.
3 you can add more points here.
Like consent oriented use of data as is done in EU under new Data Regulation
Act.
Detailed and clear mechanism for sharing data with security agencies
Etc.
Conclusion is fine.
Read others’ answer and Keep writing:)
7.5/10
Your Introduction is good aptly used current issue.
1. In this section write one or two line sentences to make it more relatable. As this is being asked explicitly.
2. You need to take a more concrete stand here.
Right privacy is important but it’s not absolute. Govt. has responsibility to ensure protection of rights of all the people.
In name of privacy no individual can’t be allowed to infringe on others’ right e.g. terrorists, money launderers, rapists etc. can’t claim right of privacy in a platform which is used to commit that crime.
The role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all. It’s must have access to data for this purpose but with transparent and detailed backing of law, not arbitrarily.
So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to
privacy, but instead, supports it.
3. More points can be suggested here such as Consent Oriented policy as of EU’s New Data Regulation Act,
Clear mechanisms for sharing data with law enforcement agencies etc.
Case study is more of general in nature. You must not write made up facts just for the sake of writing it. Avoid doing that. In intro you can write briefly about the case summarising your understanding.
1. You have identified Various values but you need to write them in a way that is more relatable with the case. Write 1-2 lines for this.
Like People rights to privacy vis-à-vis government need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Need of governments of accessing data from social media platform vis-à-vis fear of a surveillance
states etc.
2. First of all avoid making such rough sketch its UPSC mains exam not of college exam, it’s looks bad.
In this section before driving Conclusion you must also put Arguments why state need to have access for the protection of Rights of the people and national security.
Present both side of the debate. Also take a concrete stand.
3. Last section is written fine though you can add here some more points.
Shivanshu at times it become hard to make sense of what you want to express. Pls understand harder it would be for evaluator to understand lesser will be the marks allotted despite of the fact that you have good content. So work more upon your expression of knowledge.
Always try to give an introduction to your case Study, if time permits. you can write your understanding of the case in brief, can also connect it with current affairs.
1. whenever a case Study explicitly ask you to identify Ethical Issues or dilemma try to write it in 1-2 lines.
You need to write more broad issues here such as people rights to privacy Vs government’s need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Governments to access Data form social media platform Vs fear of a surveillance
state.
Issue of national sovereignty where social media platform prefer their over own company guidelines over local laws of the land etc.
2. Avoid makin graph like you did in paper 4.
Rathar than writing merit and demerits here go for more analysis based approach.
Also In your soverign functions demerits you have Written narrow political view, this is just one aspect of it. This debate is bigger than this. you point out broad Issues such as fear of Surveillance.
Take a stand here.
As Govt’s restricted access to data with transparent mechanism backed by law with strong Grievance redressal Institutions and responsible use are not anti-thetical to privacy rather strengthen it.
Your Introduction is simple, crisp and direct which is good.
You have Attempted very well especially first two questions. There is nothing much to suggest in them.
However in question three you can add more suggestions. whenever you asked to Use your stakeholders here. Remember their concerns and address them.
Also avoid suggestions like end to end encryption cancellation as It’s one of the technical innovation which strengthen the privacy of Individuals. Suggest ways around it.
Also try quote someone other than Orwell if possible as merely his name signifies fear of state surveillance. Which may not go well with UPSC evaluator.
Rest fine. Keep it up 🙂
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Vamsidhar ,
You need not to write whole question. Just leave the space and start ans directly.
Introduction of the case study Should give a glimpse to the issue raise. Here you could’ve raise running tussle between Twitter, WhatsApp and The Govt.
1. You have covered many issues but try to write in a way that looks more relatable to the case like
Govt. Control over Social Media with regards to Nation security Vs Fear of Surveillance State
National Sovereignty Vs policies of multinational social media firms
2. In this part question doesn’t ask you to write merit and demerit.
Better to take a stand and justify with various arguments.
Be clear with balanced approach
Individual privacy is very essential for human dignity, however the role of sovereign Nations authority to ensure the protection of rights of all by is institutionalizing legitimate use of social media without any discrimination so in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to right to privacy but instead supports it.
3. This section is written fine but points are Intermix. Write points related to one stakeholders say Govt. at one place then write other.
Here you can cite facts such as New Data Regulation of EU etc.
Conclusion is missing. Always conclude your answer.
Overall fine Attempt, keep writing 🙂
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Rahul,
Introduction and conclusion are fine.
However there are following issues-
1. Raise issues which are more close to the case such as
People’s right to privacy Vs Govt’s responsibly to protect rights of all,
Govt. Control over Social Media with regards to Nation security Vs Fear of Surveillance State,
National Sovereignty Vs policies of multinational social media firms etc.
2. Here you need to take a stand, and use argument to justify. Both issues are interrelated hence asked in the case. Can’t be separated.
Right to privacy like all other FR is not absolute. In the name of privacy rights Misuse of social media can not be allowed, which leads to infringement of right of others (protection of which is responsibility of the Govt).
so in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to right to privacy but instead supports it.
3. Add more points here like clear guidelines when and with what authority data can be shared,
Grievance redressal mechanisms,
Specific provisions for social media platforms to a principles of equality.
You have enough understanding. Just be more diverse and clear with your arugments.
Keep writing 🙂
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Vishal,
Your Introduction is fine. Conclusion can Written better. It’s not paper 2, write your conclusion with ethical backing in your arugments.
1. You need to write values clearly.
Ethical issues will look like issue when you present them in that way. Relate your points with the case.
Add here issues like
People rights to privacy vis-à-vis government need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Need of oversight over social media platform for National security vis-à-vis fear of a surveillance state etc
2. Your stand is right but use more moving arguments for it.
Individual privacy is very essential for human dignity, it can’t be an absolute right.
In name of privacy no individual can’t be allowed to infringe on others’ right e.g. terrorists, money launderers, rapists etc. can’t claim right of privacy on their social media.
Here comes the role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all.
So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to privacy, but instead, supports it.
3. Add more specific points here like Policy should be consent oriented like EU’ Data Regulation Act,
Clear mechanism should be established vis-a-vis sharing of data with law enforcement agencies,
Grievance redressal mechanical etc.
Govt make a law for all whether private or public, if private company doesn’t adhere to the law of the land Govt have all the authority to make it compalint. This is happening in Twitter case also.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
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Sumita,
Write brief intro to case Study, here you can highlight the current tussle between the Govt and Twitter.
1. You have to write more Issues here.
Individual’s right to privacy Vs Govt’s responsibility to ensure of rights of all,
Access to data to the Govt Vs Fear of Orwellian state,
Multinational Media firms citing rule as customer protection Vs Sovereignty of a nation etc.
2. Take a more clear stand here. In normalcy right to privacy should be give utmost importance however for safety and security of the nation and People rights of sovereign democratic Govt over data, with clear adherence transparent mechanisms, should take precedence over individual’s right to privacy.
With due checks Right of the Govt essentially Supports the enjoyment of rights by the individual.
3. Here you had to write provisions that should be in the policy. Not What Govt should do. Use points like consent oriented provision as in EU’ Data Regulation Act,
Specific detailed provisions for related to data Sharing with security agencies ,
the specific about the ways to use this information. Etc.
Be more specific and diverse in Arguments. Use facts to support arguments.
Keep practicing:)
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Kartikeya 10,
Your Introduction is very well Written.
Each section Attempted well. You have understanding of the issue.
Just improve your presentation a bit. With clear spacing and use of headings.
Also when you’re asked to suggest something like the last question you must cover all the skate holders in it. It would make answer wholistic.
Like for public- consent oriented data sharing and Grievance redressal mechanism is important.
Overall a fine Attempt. Keep writing:)
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Aabha,
Introduction can be Written much better. It would be better if you can summarize the whole case with some current example.
1. Here you can add more Issues like privacy of an individual Vs Govt’s responsibility to ensure protection of rights of all,
National security,
Multinational companies policies Vs Sovereignty of a nation etc.
2. This section is written good though more clear stand can be taken.
3. Here you didn’t ask to write about the nature of the policy how it should be. Rather you had to write specific provisions. Use your paper 2 knowledge here.
Like Consent Oriented regulation as EU’s Data Regulation Act.
Clear mechanisms about sharing of Data with law enforcement agency,
Establishing grievance redressal institution etc.
You need to go a step further in the discussion. You have clear understanding about the issue. Use your factual knowledge specially for questions like 2 and 3 of this case study.
Read others’ answers. Keep writing:)
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Ankita,
You have good understanding of currently ongoing Tussle between Twitter with government as it’s being reflected in your answer too much.
In intro you must give summary of the case and then use issue like Twitter as passing reference.
1. You need to add more issues here like national security, Sovereignty of a nation, fear of Surveillance state etc
2. Again Twitter issue is dominating here. Be more broad in your approach. Your stand is right but try to make it more direct and clear.
Use write up written after ethical Issues in question a, for this section.
3. Last question is written fine. Just try to cover all the stakeholders you have identified in the answer.
Read others’ answer, Keep writing:)
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Harshaa,
Write an introduction with summarizing the case as per your understanding.
1. added More ethical issues like People rights to privacy vis-à-vis government need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Governments access to data from social media platform vs fear of a surveillance state.
Issue of national sovereignty where social media platform prefer their over own community guidelines than laws of the land.
b) you need to take a clear stand here.
Individual privacy is very essential for human dignity but like other rights, it can’t be an absolute right. In name of privacy no individual can’t be allowed to infringe on others’ right e.g. terrorists, money launderers, rapists etc. can’t claim right of privacy on their social media interactions which was used to commit that crime.
The role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all. It’s must have access to data for this purpose
So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to
privacy, but instead, supports it.
c) Question doesn’t ask you to write what should be the nature rather ask you what should be the provision of Governments Social Media Policy could involve-
Focus on consent oriented use of data as is done in EU under new Data Regulation
Act.
Detailed and clear mechanism for data with security agencies with
the specific mandate of ways to use this information.
Setting up the institution that hear complaints of the individuals against content or
policies of social media platform etc.
Always conclude your answer.
Keep writing, you have potential to do better:)
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Arpit,
Introduction can be Written much better. At present form it’s fails in conveying your understanding of the issue clearly.
1. Taking information and surveillance are two different thing can not be equated like you did.
You need to add issues like
Right to privacy Vs Govt’s responsibility to protect those rights from infringement.
Free access to data Vs fear of Surveillance State,
Companies Private policies Vs non compliance with law of the land challenging Sovereignty of the nation etc.
2. This section is written fine. You can end this section with arguement that sincethe role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all. So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to
privacy, but instead, supports it.
3 you can add more points here.
Like consent oriented use of data as is done in EU under new Data Regulation
Act.
Detailed and clear mechanism for sharing data with security agencies
Etc.
Conclusion is fine.
Read others’ answer and Keep writing:)
7.5/10
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Your Introduction is good aptly used current issue.
1. In this section write one or two line sentences to make it more relatable. As this is being asked explicitly.
2. You need to take a more concrete stand here.
Right privacy is important but it’s not absolute. Govt. has responsibility to ensure protection of rights of all the people.
In name of privacy no individual can’t be allowed to infringe on others’ right e.g. terrorists, money launderers, rapists etc. can’t claim right of privacy in a platform which is used to commit that crime.
The role of sovereign nations’ authority to ensure the protection of rights of all. It’s must have access to data for this purpose but with transparent and detailed backing of law, not arbitrarily.
So, in this sense sovereign claim of legitimate control on social media is not antithetical to
privacy, but instead, supports it.
3. More points can be suggested here such as Consent Oriented policy as of EU’s New Data Regulation Act,
Clear mechanisms for sharing data with law enforcement agencies etc.
Conclusion is fine.
Keep writing for further improvement:)
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Shivanshu,
Case study is more of general in nature. You must not write made up facts just for the sake of writing it. Avoid doing that. In intro you can write briefly about the case summarising your understanding.
1. You have identified Various values but you need to write them in a way that is more relatable with the case. Write 1-2 lines for this.
Like People rights to privacy vis-à-vis government need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Need of governments of accessing data from social media platform vis-à-vis fear of a surveillance
states etc.
2. First of all avoid making such rough sketch its UPSC mains exam not of college exam, it’s looks bad.
In this section before driving Conclusion you must also put Arguments why state need to have access for the protection of Rights of the people and national security.
Present both side of the debate. Also take a concrete stand.
3. Last section is written fine though you can add here some more points.
Shivanshu at times it become hard to make sense of what you want to express. Pls understand harder it would be for evaluator to understand lesser will be the marks allotted despite of the fact that you have good content. So work more upon your expression of knowledge.
Keep practicing for further improvement:)
Please review
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Utkarsha,
Always try to give an introduction to your case Study, if time permits. you can write your understanding of the case in brief, can also connect it with current affairs.
1. whenever a case Study explicitly ask you to identify Ethical Issues or dilemma try to write it in 1-2 lines.
You need to write more broad issues here such as people rights to privacy Vs government’s need of information for protecting rights
of all. (E.g. from terrorist attack, riots).
Governments to access Data form social media platform Vs fear of a surveillance
state.
Issue of national sovereignty where social media platform prefer their over own company guidelines over local laws of the land etc.
2. Avoid makin graph like you did in paper 4.
Rathar than writing merit and demerits here go for more analysis based approach.
Also In your soverign functions demerits you have Written narrow political view, this is just one aspect of it. This debate is bigger than this. you point out broad Issues such as fear of Surveillance.
Take a stand here.
As Govt’s restricted access to data with transparent mechanism backed by law with strong Grievance redressal Institutions and responsible use are not anti-thetical to privacy rather strengthen it.
3.try to Write more concrete suggestions here
Always write a Conclusion.
Read others’ answers. Keep practicing:)
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Krishna,
Your Introduction is simple, crisp and direct which is good.
You have Attempted very well especially first two questions. There is nothing much to suggest in them.
However in question three you can add more suggestions. whenever you asked to Use your stakeholders here. Remember their concerns and address them.
Also avoid suggestions like end to end encryption cancellation as It’s one of the technical innovation which strengthen the privacy of Individuals. Suggest ways around it.
Also try quote someone other than Orwell if possible as merely his name signifies fear of state surveillance. Which may not go well with UPSC evaluator.
Rest fine. Keep it up 🙂