Mentor’s Comments-
- Introduce by giving the gist of the case study.
- Enumerate the stakeholders involved in the case study and their interests.
- In brief present a case to convince the DM for the need of government intervention in the above
situation. - Conclude on the basis of the above points.
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Karun
Good attempt. You have written a content rich answer.
Introduction is fine, identification of stakeholders is good, you can add- the probationary officer himself; the Gram Sabha; NGOs/Civil Society.
Try to avoid dividing the whole issue in the binary of capitalism vs communism because there are many issues involved, however, you can subtly mention it( mention of Marx, Gandhi etc are good).
In the second part, you need to also mention what all you need to present in the case – highlight the present situation( lack of livelihood opportunities, details of benefit sharing pacts, work of the company, type of products manufactured, impact of IPR filing etc); also bring into focus lack of government efforts.
Next you can mention the steps that need to be taken, which you have written quite well.
Conclusion is good too.
Try to frame your answer according to the question. You are writing well.
Keep practicing. 🙂