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- https://www.thehindu.com/
opinion/lead/in-persian-gulf- littoral-cooperative-security- is-key/article31774318.ece - In the intro, you can mention the significance of the region for not only India but for the world in fulfiling its energy needs.
- In the body, you can mention the security issues the region is grappling with. As for the importance of the region for India-bilateral trade, crude oil import, remittances, investment in India etc can be mentioned.
- Conclude by mentioning the need for nurturing the ties with the region.
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There are two elements in the question:
Importance of Persian Gulf Region for India
Implications of Stability and Security on India’s interest
So your 1st part of the answer should divide content in these two subheadings.
The importance is:
Diaspora
Remittances
Energy need
Geopolitics
Implications will have points like:
Muslim Minority angle in domestic politics
Investment
Fuel cost
Hyphenation of various bilateral relations that India has with Persian Gulf states
These elements are not covered properly in your answer.
Also, do draw a diagram highlighting the region in the question. In IR related question, it is very important to draw these small maps.
In the 2nd part, you should have added a couple of points regarding what steps should India take
to defuse the tensions in the region and at the same time domestic reforms like diversifying India’s energy basket to overcome over dependence on the region.
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IN the 2nd pat of the answer, your 1st and 3rd points need to be more specific as in how they have wider implications on India’s interests. Like you linked your 2nd point with India’s interest, similarly, your other two points should link with India’s interest.
The rest of the answer is well structured and discussed.
Good that you mentioned way forwards in the end.
Try to write a brief conclusion as well in your answer.
Good presentation and division in your answer.
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Draw a small diagram of the gulf region.
In the 1st part of the answer, you discussed various security and stability issues in the region but missed to link with India’s interest. How will these events affect India’s needs and interests in the short and long term? That is the demand of the 1st statement of the question.
The 2nd part is well covered.
Try to give specific way forwards in the end. What steps should India take in the region: security engagement with navies; working on social capital in the region; diversifying our own energy basket in order to save from blushes and unplanned situations etc.
Good presentation.
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While discussing security and stability issues in the region, you have to link them with India’s interests and how they affect our needs.
The 2nd part is well managed.
But way forward is missing from the answer.
You should mention couple of bullet points regarding steps that India can take in the region to ensure stability and security as well as protecting its own interests.
Read the answer of Aastha. You will understand what I am talking about.
Try to widen your coverage
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Only in the 2nd part of the answer, you have mentioned implications on India’s interests of these events in the Gulf region.
In a better structure, divide your answer into two parts:
The importance is:
Diaspora
Remittances
Energy need
Geopolitics
Implications will have points like:
Muslim Minority angle in domestic politics
Investment
Fuel cost
Hyphenation of various bilateral relations that India has with Persian Gulf states
These elements are not covered properly in your answer.
Good that you drew a diagram of the region. Keep it up.
Way forward is missing from the answer. What steps should India take in the region to secure its interest and provide stability in the region?
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