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- https://www.economist.com/
special-report/2020/06/20/the- uns-structures-built-in-1945- are-not-fit-for-2020-let- alone-beyond-it - In the intro, you can mention the context of WW2 in which the UN came into being.
- In the body, mention the issues such as overlap in functions of its various agencies, budget constraints, working in silos, inadequate representation in the security council etc. Need for reforms can be underscored by the recent failure of the UNSC to address the Covid pandemic issue. Apart from that, there is a growing demand for expansion of UNSC to be more representative etc. can be cited.
- Conclude by stressing the need for the adoption of changes.
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Hi Deepika
Rephrase your introduction,grammatical errors are there.
Before mentioning the issues,explain briefly the functions of UN.
You have discussed the issues in a good manner,have covered various aspects.
Lackluster conclusion,write something like this despite having many short-comings, UN has played a crucial role making this human society more civil, more peaceful and secure.
Work on basic grammar.
A good attempt.
Keep writing.
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Hi Vishesh
Try to write short introduction.
Explain briefly the role of UN then mention the issues.
Also write non conventional challenges for UN like climate change,refugee problem etc.
Try to cover wider aspects.
Underline keywords to convince examiner easily.
Work on presentation to get extra marks.
Good conclusion.
Keep writing,you will succeed.
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Hi Aastha
Good introduction.
Explain briefly the role of UN then mention the issues.
You have mentioned the issues and reforms in a decent manner.
Overall content is diversified and well placed.
Well structured answer.
You have the potential of writing good answers,you can join our Mains guidance program.
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Keep writing!
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Rephrase your introduction.
Instead of mentioning the various parts of UN,mention briefly the various roles of UN.
Rest of the answer is good and well attempted.
Conclude by stressing the need for the adoption of changes.
Work on basic grammar.
Avoid scribbling.
A decent attempt.
Keep it up.
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Hi Chester
Good introduction
Answer is in accordance to the demand of the question.
thumbs up for – how current structure has outlived UN’s utility.
You have discussed the reforms in a good manner.
Content is diversified.
Well structured answer.
You have the potential to write good answers,keep it up.
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Hi Dakshina
Rewrite introduction, what was the purpose of its formation.
Before citing the deficiencies, briefly explain the functions of UN and its relevance in 21st century.
Work on basic grammar.
You did not mention what reforms are needed .
Brainstorm before writing.
Avoid using unnecessary alphabets in between of a sentence.
Concluding by explaining the importance of UN.
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Hi Parakh
Good introduction
You have mentioned the issues in a detailed manner .
Also explain the relevance of UN and its main purposes to add dimensions in your answer.
Solutions are good .
Thumbs up for concluding remarks.
Well structured answer.
Work on your handwriting.
Overall good attempt.
Keep writing,you will succeed.