Mentor’s comment:
- https://www.thehindu.com/opinion/lead/equitys-weak-pulse-and-commodified-medicine/article30601664.ece
- In intro briefly explain what is implied in the word ‘commodification’.
- In the main body, explain how the medical sector is being turned into a market and how limited the footprint of the government and lack of all-encompassing healthcare systems like NHS in the UK has wide implications for the healthcare system in India. Also, comment on the contribution of the private sector at the same time role of the private sector in the area as a business entity and implications of such conflicting motives for the system.
- In conclusion, mention the need for the regulation and increasing the coverage of the public healthcare system.
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The overall discussion is general in nature and again the points are repetitive in nature.
Work on your content Vishal.
This is an important topic and you will find so many talking points in the realm of UPSC websites.
Also, try to inculcate the mentor’s comments in your answer structure to get the maximum output from your answer. They are written for your benefits and if you do not pay attention to them then what is the point of giving it.
The overall content needs more points and dimensions.
In intro briefly explain what is implied in the word ‘commodification’.
In the main body, explain how the medical sector is being turned into a market and how limited the footprint of the government and lack of all-encompassing healthcare systems like NHS in the UK has wide implications for the healthcare system in India.
Also, comment on the contribution of the private sector at the same time role of the private sector in the area as a business entity and implications of such conflicting motives for the system.
In conclusion, mention the need for the regulation and increasing the coverage of the public healthcare system. This will be your way forward.
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Ok sir… I’ll definitely work on it.
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The overall discussion is quite good.
A very good intro.
The answer has good depth and coverage.
Very good structuring
Good presentation.
Underline imp stuff in your answers.
Good conclusion as well as the way forward.
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Decent discussion overall.
You covered all the necessary arguments.
Good balance between the two parts.
The content in the whole answer is fluid and well explained.
Good use of the flowchart and the content discussed in it is satisfactory.
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