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- In the intro, you could mention the countries expenditure as a percentage of GDP on health.
- In the body, mention the various issues health sector faces- low doctors to population ratio, inadequate hospital beds, quality of public health sector etc. In the suggestions, you can mention increasing expenditure on health, health insurance, regulation of private sector, increasing the number of doctor and hospital etc.
- In conclusion, you can mention the steps like Ayushman Bharat but also stress the importance of robust health infrastructure in order to deal effectively with future challenges like pandemics.
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Hi Deepika
Briefly explain why adequate health infrastructure is important for India.
You have mentioned some good points in the challenges part.
But the solution part needs more comprehensive coverage. You can add points like enabling preventive care,bringing behavioural changes,creating a nodal agency etc.
Diversify your content.
Good concluding remarks.
Work on handwriting,avoid scribbling
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Hi
Rephrase your introduction.
In the 10 marker questions, you mentioned the challenges part in more than one page,try to write crisp and concise so that within the given word limit you can add more dimensions.
No need to mention how many beds are are in China and Russia.
Measures are good but not enough.
Add some steps like enabling preventive care,bringing behavioural changes,creating a nodal agency and cooperative federalism etc.
Diversify and enrich your content.
Conclusion is missing.
Work hard!
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Hi Vinay
Good introduction.
Content is good and well placed.
Also briefly explain why health systems are core social institutions in any society.
Good concluding remarks.
Thumbs up for triple helix model .
Overall a good attempt.
Keep it up !
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Hi Vishesh
There is a need to rephrase your introduction.
Good use of flow chart.
Content is there but need to diversify it,you can write about NITI Aayog’s National Health Stack and enabling preventive care and bringing behavioural changes etc.
Conclusion is good.
Avoid using short forms in your answer like dr,no, etc.
Work on basic grammar and avoid spelling mistakes.
Work hard,keep it up !
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Hi Dakshina
This is the question of health so do not write about education in the introduction.
Use of flow chart is appreciable.
Challenges and way forward are good and decently explained,thumbs up !
Also mention the importance of adequate health system in India.
Good concluding remarks.
A decent attempt.
Persistence is the key to success,keep writing !
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Hi Chester
Good introduction.
Example of Gorakhpur incident is good .
Good explanation of challenges and how to revamp health care system.
with this content,write something this also that in order to catalyse people’s participation for healthy India, there is need for Swasth Bharat Jan Andolan on lines of Swachh Bharat Abhiyaan , to get better marks.
A decent attempt.
Well structured answer.
Scan properly.
Work on basic grammar and avoid spelling mistakes.