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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/ antonio-guterres-united- nations-coronavirus-pandemic- syed-akbaruddin-6485727/ - In the intro, briefly mention the disruption caused by corona pandemic.
- In the body, challenges faced by global order and heightened by pandemic- rising geopolitical tensions, climate change, global distrust, trade war etc can be mentioned. In the role India could play includes a partnership with like-minded nations in shaping the emerging order.
- Conclude by highlighting why addressing these challenges is important for India.
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Hi Parakh
Good introduction.
Always try to explain your subheadings, like you just wrote global mistrust, explain it in 1-2 lines.
In the role of India, some good points are there but need to add more like need to move from non-alignment to multi-alignment,working together with a group of countries from the developed and developing countries could further amplify India’s voice etc.
Use of flow chart is appreciable.
In the conclusion, explain the need of multi-lateralism and reassert the role of India in this situation.
Improve your handwriting, write neat and legible.
A good attempt.
Keep writing !
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Hi Taran
Good introduction.
You have explained the challenges in global order in a decent manner.
But explain the role India could play includes a partnership with like-minded nations in shaping the emerging order like India can shift from Non-Alignment to Multi-Alignment to restore global order,India could lead a coalition to bridge the deficit of trust between China and the rest of the world etc.
Concluding remarks are good.
Always try to write some way forward.
Work on handwriting and underline keywords.
Keep writing !
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Hi Dakshina
Good introduction.
Write about the global geopolitical challenges domestic political polarization,cyber attacks, lack of trust in media,recession in major powers,trade war etc.
After using flow chart,give a heading about what you are writing .
There are some good points in India’s role but need to add more like to make use of the opportunities, for itself and for the provision of certain global public goods, India’s cooperation with like-minded actors can be the solution. India could work closely with the Alliance for multilateralism etc.
Concluding remarks are good.
Work on handwriting.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Keep writing!
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Hi Deepika
Lackluster introduction,briefly mention the disruption caused by corona pandemic in the global order.
You have explained the challenges part in a good manner,keep it up !
In India’s role,you can add that the way to combat this pandemic is through the resolution of ‘Collaborate to Create’ (by PM Modi).
Add also that with the growing mistrust for China,India has an opportunity to become the world’s manufacturing hub and stable economic power. This will help India in assuming leadership roles and maintaining a stable global economic system.
Good conclusion.
Add diverse points to get good marks.
Overall a decent attempt.
Keep writing.
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Hi Kritika
Good introduction.
Challenges part is well explained !
In India’s role, some good points but you can also add that India could lead a coalition to bridge the deficit of trust between China and the rest of the world.
There is a need to move from non-alignment to multi-alignment to survive in this global disruption.
Good Conclusion.
Avoid using unnecessary capital alphabets in between of a sentence.
Work hard,you will succeed !
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Hi NJ
Good introduction.
You have explained the situation before pandemic and after pandemic in a wonderful manner.
But in the way forward ,need to more points like to make use of the opportunities, for itself and for the provision of certain global public goods, India’s cooperation with like-minded actors can be the solution. India could work closely with the Alliance for multilateralism, an initiative launched by Germany and France, to shape both the alliance itself and the reform agenda at large.
Good concluding remarks.
Overall the content is good and well placed.
Keep writing !
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Hi Sneha
Good introductory lines.
You have explained the challenges part in a wonderful manner.
Always try to explain the subheadings in one or two lines.
India’s role is well explained but also write that India must redouble its efforts, along with partners such as the USA, to push for a multi-stakeholder model of internet governance.
Rest of the content is good and well placed.
Good conclusion.
Underline keywords.
Persistence is the key to success,keep writing,you will succeed !
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Hi Chester
In the introduction, briefly mention the disruption caused by corona pandemic.
You have explained the challenges part in a decent manner.
Write the opportunities for India like India has taken the lead in promoting various multilateral initiatives like International Solar Alliance, proposing CCIT for combating terrorism, Asia-Africa Growth corridor so it is a good opportunity for India to take the lead role.
Rest of the content is good.
Work on presentation to get better marks.
Good conclusion.
You are improving ! Keep it up.
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Hi Mehul
Lackluster introduction,in the introduction, briefly mention the disruption caused by corona pandemic.
In the challenges part ,write about the global geopolitical challenges domestic political polarization,cyber attacks, lack of trust in media,recession in major powers,trade war etc.
Brainstorm before writing.
You have tried to explain the India’s role in a good manner but a lot of content has to be added like India could work closely with the Alliance for multilateralism,India has an opportunity to become the world’s manufacturing hub and stable economic power etc.
Conclusion is missing.
Conclude by highlighting why addressing these challenges is important for India.
Work on handwriting .
Work hard.
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Hi Vishesh
Good introduction.
Do not draw a line to demarcate introduction and body of the answer,instead use headings and subheadings.
Challenges part is explained in a good manner but need to add points like climate changes, cyber attacks, trade wars etc.
India’s role is well explained by you.
Good concluding remarks.
Work on handwriting and presentation to get better marks.
Give your answer a better structure.
Content is good.
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi Vinay
Good introduction.
Challenges part is well explained .
Write about the India’s role and opportunities to complete your answer.
You can write that India could work closely with the Alliance for multilateralism,India has an opportunity to become the world’s manufacturing hub and stable economic power and India has an opportunity to become the world’s manufacturing hub and stable economic power etc.
Read mentor’s comment before writing,it will help you.
Work on structure.
You have the potential of writing good answers,keep writing !
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Hi Sumona
In the introduction,only write the disruptions caused by the pandemic.
Write crisp and concise as it is a 10 marker question.
In the challenges part,write about the trade war, growing mistrust in media,recession in major powers, protectionism etc.
Some good points in India’s role but need to add more like India could work closely with the Alliance for multilateralism,
Instead of writing that India’s International solar alliance should be strengthen,write that ndia has taken the lead in promoting various multilateral initiatives like International Solar Alliance, proposing CCIT for combating terrorism, Asia-Africa Growth corridor so it is a good opportunity for India to take the lead role.
Good conclusion.
Work on diversification of the content.
Learn to manage your writing space.
Keep writing,you will succeed.