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- In the introduction briefly explain the existing inequality globally between the rich-poor, Men-women. Quote data to substantiate better.
- In the body discuss how wide the gap between the richest and the rest is. Explain that globally, extreme poverty rates are 4% higher for women than men; this gap rises to 22% during women’s peak productive and reproductive ages; that is, 122 women aged 25-34 for every 100 men of the same age group live in extremely poor households, largely due to childcare responsibilities. Suggest what needs to be done to address the issue.
- Conclude with urgency to change the situation and doing away of the inequality.
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Hi Samiksha
Your answer is looking like an essay, refrain from big paragraphs, write in points or a mix of points and small paragraphs.
Try to fragment your answer.
Good introduction.
Try to summarise your content, you have written the data about rich and poor in more than half a page, summarise it and write the impact of this gap under different subheadings like social ,political etc.
Way forward is well explained.
Underline important stuff and refrain from monotony.
Keep writing, you will improve.