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- https://vk.com/doc562341376_
558583356?hash= 9848149162eaaf5a93&dl= dc100bbf20d792fd19 - In the intro, briefly mention the issues involved in the case.
- In the body, first, explain the what immunity of the state is. As implications mention that immunity of state officials is based on treaties either bilateral or multilateral but after this judgement, many states could enact laws to provide immunity to their military forces. As the next course of action, India should ensure fair trial in Italy and also examine the what went wrong in India’s executive and the judicial branch’s actions.
- Conclude by stating that as a good international citizen, India has accepted the tribunal’s award. Now it must ensure that Italy fully honours it.
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@Parth Verma Sir, please review.
Hi Shubham
You have written the answer like a newspaper article.
Give headings and subheadings .
Write about the International Tribunal,how it was formed and its functions.
Then give a separate subheading – he judgement could set the wrong precedent then write your content in points.
After that explain what should be the next course of action for India.
Then conclude.
Give a structure to your answer.
Add dimensions to get better marks.
Avoid using short forms .
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Deepika
Good introduction.
Explain briefly about the International Tribunal.
Implication part is well written.
In the way forward ,also write that this is also a time for the executive and judicial branches of the Indian state to introspect on how they handled the whole affair politically, diplomatically and legally.
Rest of the content is good and well placed.
Work on handwriting.
Overall a good attempt.
Keep it up.
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Hi NJ
To the point introduction,keep it up !
Before writing the issues, write about the International Tribunal in brief.
Thumbs up for the issue part.
Next course of action is also good.
You need to work on spellings,
Content is good and well placed,
Overall a good answer.
Keep writing !
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Hi Dakshina
Need to rephrase your introduction, grammatical errors are there.
You have explained the meaning of immunity and immunity of state officials but did not mention how the judgement could set the wrong precedent and how this can lead to an increase in tensions generally and especially between inimical states.
Forward course of action is good,keep it up!
Also explain from this judgement India should take the lessons, in the legal and diplomatic domains.
Concluding remarks are good !
Improve handwriting and presentation.
Keep writing!
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Hi Unnati
Good introduction.
Explain briefly about the International Tribunal.
Explain briefly the meaning of immunity and immunity of state officials .
In the way forward ,also write that this is also a time for the executive and judicial branches of the Indian state to introspect on how they handled the whole affair politically, diplomatically and legally.
Good conclusion.
Need to work on handwriting, leave proper space between the lines.
Avoid grammatical errors.
Keep writing !
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Hi Mehul
First thing, need to work hard on your handwriting !
Write crisp and concise so that you can add more content in the given word limit.
Rephrase your introduction.
Some good points but need to add more like you can explain the meaning of immunity and immunity of state officials . Mention how the judgement could set the wrong precedent and how this can lead to an increase in tensions generally and especially between inimical states.
Concluding remarks are missing, Conclude by stating that as a good international citizen, India has accepted the tribunal’s award. Now it must ensure that Italy fully honors it.
Underline important stuff.
Work hard,you will improve.
Do not get demotivated by the marks, keep writing !