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- https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/columns/kota-infant-death-toll-rises-infant-mortality-rate-india-healthcare-services-6205180/
- There has been repeated incidents where a large number of children has died like Gorakhpur and Kota.
- The article examines the issues with such incidents and analyses who are the victim of such incidents.
- In intro, state some incidents and why it is a matter of concern for India.
- In the main body discuss the reasons for such incidents.
- Also, discuss the initiatives and schemes launched by the government in the public health sector.
- Suggest the ways for improving the system- like an increase in the expenditure, efficient delivery of services under the various insurance schemes.
- Conclude by stressing the urgency of implementing the required suggestions and tackling the shortcoming that repeatedly leads to such incidents.
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After intro, discuss why it is a matter of concern for India.
Also after discussing the steps taken by the government, discuss what more needs to be done make these initiatives a success.
The rest of the answer has decent coverage.
The overall direction of the answer is quite good.
Good points and they are explained in a fine manner.
Good intro.
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In intro, state some incidents and why it is a matter of concern for India.
You have discussed the general issues of health system but the question is specifically asking about the child death issue. The major factors that need to be discussed are the health of the mother, sanitation, access to clean water, hygiene along with the issue of infrastructure in our health system.
The same set of issues need to be addressed through your way forward.
The overall discussion is off the track.
Read the model answer when it is available.
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The overall approach of the answer is decent.
Good content in the main body.
Structuring is quite decent
Very good way forward.
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A very good answer.
You hit the core demand of the question nicely.
But what makes the answer most effective is its way forward and the depth in it.
These little things go a long way in increasing 1-2 marks in each answer because the overall content is the same as everyone. It is the way to present them, which makes the difference.
The overall content is decent and well explained.
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After intro, discuss why it is a matter of concern for India.
The only blip in the answer is that your answer is monotonous in terms of presentation. Use some diagrams or flowchart to make the answer different.
Otherwise, the attempt is very good.
Your answer has proper balance and structure.
The content in both parts have good coverage.
Points are solid and crisp.
Decent depth in the content
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It’s good that you discussed all the solutions in two different subheadings.
Decent structuring of the answer.
Good that you discussed all the reasons in different subheadings, thus giving wider coverage to your answer while making the points distinct.
It’s a good style. Keep it up.
The 2nd part of the answer is also good.
The language is short and calculative.
The presentation is decent but underline imp points.