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- In the introduction briefly start with key facts/data showing the increase in the elderly population.
- In the body, explain that equipping people in earlier age cohorts will help them remain in good health and involved in the community throughout the ageing process. Discuss how ageing is irreversible and inevitable.Explain that stronger partnerships between civil society, community and families are necessary to
complement the actions taken by Governments in this regard.
Discuss aspects like – The Madrid International Plan of Action adopted at the Second World Assembly on Ageing in 2002 offered a bold new agenda for handling the issue of ageing in the 21st-century. - Conclude with the significant contributions that aged people can make to the society.
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Hi Arun
Do not define what is elderly, instead start with some data related to elderly population.
Before writing the ways to improve the condition of elderly, write the issues related to them.
You can write-
-Isolation and loneliness among the elderly is rising.
-Rise in age-related chronic illness.
Plan the structure before writing.
Good conclusion.
Keep writing.
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Hi SB
First thing, your answer looks very monotonus, give proper headings and subheadings to present your answer in a better structured manner.
Need to fragment your content, and work on content.
Simply write the problems associated with elderly population then suggest the strategy to overcome these problems.
Plan the structure before writing and stick to the demand of the question.
Do not get demoalised by the marks, keep writing, you will succeed.
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Hi Vaishnavi
Good introduction.
Before writing the ways to improve the condition of elderly, write the issues related to them.
You can write-
-Isolation and loneliness among the elderly is rising.
-Rise in age-related chronic illness.
Suggested strategy is good.
Good conclusion.
Underline keywords .
Keep working hard.