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- This question asks about how the concept of secularism could pose challenges to cultural practices.
- In the intro, briefly describe India’s approach to secularism.
- In the body, describe instances that involve the conflict between the idea of secularism and our cultural practices.
- Such instances could be Sabarimala verdict, cultural tradition vs secular tradition-Challenging appointment of priests on the basis of Agamas, Challenging of Triple talaq and polygamy practiced by the Muslims for long, banning of certain food consumed by a section of society by the government, demand for Uniform Civil code, Jallikattu issue.
- Conclude by the stressing need to balance the two- the need for the secular ethos in the society and preservation of our culture.
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Better content and explanation are needed in the answer.
The direction is good but the pinpoint content and discussion are needed.
You have to discuss various other elements in the context like:
1) constrained govt support- Since culture in India is very much linked to religion, and govt must be unbiased, some aspects of our religious practices gets neglected
2)homogenization-diversity is sometimes under threat because of the requirement of a homogeneous cultural education in a secular education system.
3)loss of identity- especially in the case of the culture of small minorities. As govt support is limited(secular constraint)
4)Modern secular education in India has tended to emphasize many aspects of ancient Indian religious and cultural practices etc.
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The intro is quite big.
You have discussed the examples and recent events but have not discussed how they are related to secularism and its effects on our cultural practices. You can broadly
The challenges to our cultural practices
1. Stopping of festival practices:
Many secular forces have been trying to undermine religious practices especially festive ones citing it to be against the secular spirit of India. Due to such forces, ancient festivities that hold great cultural significance are slowly being eroded.
Ex: Worshipping of animals and plants are considered offensive.
2. Hinderance in the mode of worship
India is a highly diverse society where multiple religions co-exist along with unique modes of worship. Being secular does not mean stopping worshipping practices, instead, it must be freedom to practice any mode of worship without any fears.
3. Effects on food culture
Hurting religious feelings of one particular group in the name of secular credentials is highly unwarranted. It can be in the form of consuming foods just to prove a point. This can also trigger conflicts between religious groups.
4. Effects on family values
Indian traditional family values focus on respecting elders, belief in stronger marital ties, maintaining family bonds, etc. Secular beliefs have tried to undermine these values considering them as medieval and backward. This has created a sense of illusion in mind of the new generation regarding these values.
So these are how examples are linked to the main content.
The language is fine in the answer.
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The content is fine but certain points lack context. The medicine point is overly redundant and not needed in the context of the demand of the question.
Your direction is ok.
Avoid lengthy explanations.
The overall structure is fine.
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The content, structure, and presentation are apt.
Your coverage is decent.
The points are well placed.
This was a tricky question for many people but you handled it perfectly.
A very good answer, al in all.
Sir please review my answer.