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- https://indianexpress.com/
article/opinion/columns/farm- bills-parliament-monsoon- session-agriculture-sector- msp-hardeep-s-puri-6606714/ - In the body, mention the need for reforms in agri marketing and contract farming.
- In the body, discuss the changes introduced by the Bills in agri marketing and contract farming by giving freedom to farmers and laying down the legal framework for the farmers.
- Conclude by mentioning how the farm bills will bring transformative changes in our agricultural sector and reduce wastage.
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Hi Samikhsha
Good introduction.
You have stressed on issues only, follow a proper structure.
After writing issues, suggest some strategy to overcome these challenges then conclude with way forward or significance.
In the measures, you can write empowering State Farmers Commissions and improve agricultural infrastructure to strengthen competition.
Though content is good but work on presentation is a must do, your answer looks monotonous.
Leave space between the paragraphs and use headings and subheadings .
Keep writing !