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In the introduction, briefly demonstrate the significance of geriatric care in India.
List some of the core policies and programmes aimed at elderly population.
Assess the implementation of these welfare schemes and highlight the lacunae and major reasons behind the same.
Conclude by briefly suggesting the way forward.
Answer:
The number of elderly in India was 103.8 million in 2011 and is projected to be 173.2 million in 2026. The Government of India has demonstrated its commitment to ensure a secure, dignified and productive life for the elderly through various measures.
Major Schemes for elderly in India:
National Policy on Older Persons
Integrated Programme for Older Persons (IPOP)
Indira Gandhi National Old Age Pension Scheme
Indira Gandhi National Widow Pension Scheme
Annapurna scheme
National Programme for Health Care of Elderly (NPHCE)
Preference in the case of railway concessions and seat reservations for elderly in buses.
Inadequacy of Returns:
Schemes are often criticized for providing only minimal social security coverage.
Gender differentials: Women face greater vulnerabilities and isolation in old age, however, government schemes often ignore this factor.
Lack of competent human resources: There is a need of more than 10 million caregivers to address the needs of elderly population and a massive training programme to create competent human resource.
It is essential to have an easy and transparent disbursement system in place which can be facilitated through technological solutions like JAM trinity. Panchayati Raj Institutions (PRIs) and civil society need to play an active role in creating awareness and expanding coverage of the ongoing schemes. All stakeholders, Central and State government, statutory bodies, leading academic and research institutions, social activists and donors must work in tandem to translate schemes into purposeful action.
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Hi Rakesh
A little intro is needed in the answer. Do not start the main discussion right away.
The main body is good.
But you need to mention proper way forwards before concluding the answer.
Good conclusion.
The explanation is good.
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Hi Kanchan
Very good attempt.
Right from intro till conclusion, the structure is decent.
Points are comprehensive and well placed.
Language crisp and explanation apt.
All in all nice answer.
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Hi Amandeep
Combine the 1st coupe of paragraphs to make an unified intro. That way your structure gets better in the answer.
Good 1st half.
Balance is good in the 2nd half because you mentioned +ves changes as well. Well done.
Way forwards are well discussed.
But do write conclusion towards the end.
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Hi Ayush
Very good intro.
The 1st part is dealt with nice approach and points.
But the 2nd part needs more content.
You have to discuss the issues with the schemes with more points.
Also mention the way forwards in order to improve the scenario for elderly people. What more can be done?
Pls review
Hi Wasim
Quite unique way forwards.
A conclusion would have made this a perfect answer.
Apart from that, there is nothing wrong with your attempt.
Good content and presentation.
Structure and flow of the answer is smooth.
keep writing
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Hi Balakumaran
Well tried.
The overall answer is good.
You have placed all the necessary arguments in the answer with proper structure.
Presentation can be improved.
Points are deep in explanation but you could discuss couple of more points in the 2nd part. Read the model answer.
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Hi Sourav
Combine the 1st coupe of paragraphs and edit them to make an unified intro. That way your structure gets better in the answer.
Good points after intro in the flow chart. You covered almost all the important aspects of the problem.
The discussion in the main body is well attempted.
You have enough points and dimensions there.
The concluding paragraph can also be divided into bullet points and made the presentation better to achieve coherence.
Avoid lengthy statements.
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Hi Sahithya
Very good intro.
The structure is decent.
The concluding paragraph can also be divided into bullet points and made the presentation better to achieve coherence.
Points are comprehensive and well placed.
Language crisp and explanation apt.
All in all good attempt.
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Hi Ashraf
The image quality is little blurred. Avoid this in future.
You mentioned budget 2019 incentives for elderly but what were they? Avoid such general statements. Give proper content in it.
The main body is OK.
But in the end you discussed the some of the examples of states wrt elderly care. Rather than discussing that, you should mention the way forwards in order to improve the scenario and “schemes” for elderly people. What more can be done?
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Hi Avani
Points are comprehensive and well placed.
Language crisp and explanation apt.
Right from intro till conclusion, the structure is decent.
All in all nice answer.
You have improved a lot in your answer writing.
Now is the time to take next step.
You have to start discussing these points with little more explanations. That means that your reliance o n short statements should now gradually be decreased and use proper statements.
Write as many points as you know but write 1-2 statements about that point. It’s always better to cover more points and write couple of statements.
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