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- In the introduction briefly define what patriarchy is.
- In the body one must explain why patriarchy is a phenomenon that is consistently witnessed in the Indian society historically.
Discuss the reasons in detail – historical milieu, power and cultural perception, the ideology of motherhood which restricts women’s mobility and burdens them with the responsibilities to nurture and rear children etc.
Also point out to debates of various sociologists to substantiate your points.
Differentiate and compare public and private patriarchy.(define, key features, relevance etc.) - Conclude that over time mindsets are undergoing change and it’s time to change the approach of then society and enter a new era of equity and equality in terms of gender and their roles.
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Deepika you answer is not well-diversified.
Describe briefly how patriarchy has hampered the position of the middle class working women in India in contemporary times.
You can also mention SDG (goal no.5- gender equality) to fetch extra marks.
Mention how patriarchy promotes systemic deprivation and violence against women.
Structure is good but need to work upon content.
Keep writing !
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Hi Vishesh
Your structure of answer is good .
Mention these points- dowry deaths, high level of female illiteracy,
malnutrition, undernourishment as the consequences of patriarchy.
You need to work upon your handwriting.
Underline keywords to convince examiner easily.
Provide proper gap between words and sentences.
Avoid using abbreviations.
Keep writing!
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Hi Vishal
How in patriarchy,men hold authority over poverty ??
In the historical women’s ??
Rephrase your answer.
Need to diversify your answer.For example in this answer, you can
mention dowry deaths, wife-beating, high level of female illiteracy,
malnutrition, undernourishment and SDG goal.
Lackluster conclusion.
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Dakshina
Always start your answer with capital alphabet.
Rephrase your introduction.
Streedhan is different ,read about it.
Discuss the reasons in detail – historical milieu, power and cultural perception etc.
Clarify the topic by giving a detailed account as to how and why it occurred, or what is the particular context.
Work hard on content.
Improve your basic grammar,it creates negative impact.
Conclusion should be catchy.
Work hard,you will improve.
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Hi Teja
Learn the difference between its and it’s.
Describe briefly how patriarchy has hampered the position of the middle class working women in India in contemporary times.
Your answer lacks diversification.
Structure is good.
Substantiate your answer with relevant associated facts.
Lackluster conclusion,mention that it is our ethical responsibility to
provide equal opportunity.
Keep writing,you will improve.
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Hi
Your answer is well structured.
Introduction should be catchy,mention that patriarchy
hampered the position of the middle class working women in India in contemporary times.
You have mentioned the causative factors of the existence of the patriarchy in a good manner.
You can also mention gender equality as one of the SDGs and some keywords like ethical and moral responsibility to provide equality to women.
Overall good attempt.
Keep it up!
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