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- In the introduction you can give the definition of Urban commons with examples.
- In the body discuss the importance of urban commons in urban areas. How they act as a nutritional buffer and safety net for migrants .
Discuss about the various challenges faced by the urban commons and how we have failed in India to conserve the same. What measures are needed to tackle it? - Conclude with way forward about how our cities can hold out any promise of a better future only if the commons play a central role in urban planning.
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After intro, make a subheading regarding “the importance of Urban Commons in ensuring just and liveable cities”
Without the subheading, your answer will remain directionless irrespective of the good points
You did not focus much on the “just and Liveable” aspect of Urban Commons in the 1st part.
Use bullet points in the answer.
The 2nd part is well managed and the coverage there is decent.
Good way forwards.
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Good intro.
But make your subheading more apt for the demand of the question.
Write “Importance of Urban Commons in Ensuring Just and Liveable Cities.”
The 1st part of your answer is well managed.
Your 2nd part of the answer is well covered.
Good and decent points there.
The way forwards are the real gem of the answer.
In terms of structure, presentation and flow, there is nothing wrong in the answer.
Good presentation.
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The only issue with your answer is the length and encroaching word limit of the content.
To avoid breaching page and word limit, try to use flowchart in your answers, specially in the more factual part like the part where you discussed types of urban commons in the 1st part. That could have been easily covered in a small diagram or flowchart to save you space and words.
The overall discussion is in the right direction.
The points covered in the 2nd part are apt and precise.
Good way forwards.
The structure is well managed.
Good answer overall but deducting a mark for breaching word limit.
See how NJ has covered those aspects which I highlighted through a diagram
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Make your subheading more apt for the demand of the question. Write “Importance of Urban Commons in Ensuring Just and Liveable Cities.”
The points in the 1st subheading, especially the 1st few points need to be specific as they are vague and not connected to the “Just and Liveable Cities” concept.
For that, read the answer of Deepika where she has covered some good points in the 1st part.
The 2nd part of the answer is good.
The coverage and explanation are decent.
Your way forwards, keeping Urban Local Bodies in the solution is good and apt.
The overall structure is good.
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Write subheadings according to the demand of the question Dakshina.
Instead of writing “Contribution”, you should write “Importance of Urban Commons in Ensuring Just and Liveable Cities.”
Content in that subheading is decent enough. Keep it up.
The issues and challenges discussed seems repetitive in nature and have less depth.
Talk about lack of proper urban planning, gated communities, out of reach for poor and migrants etc.
Good way forwards but do include the role that ULBs should play as well as the vision for future smart cities. That will lend weight to your overall content there.
Good structure of the answer
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