Mentor’s Comment:
- In the intro briefly describe the phase the Indian economy is going through and decreasing growth rate
- In the main body of the answer explain the benefit of each option and site some facts in favour of argument. Like tax cut only increases the spending power of a few who might not be interested in spending more. While government spending can put the money in the hands of people who are more eager to spend.
- Explain the consequences of both the options.
- In the concluding remark, lay more emphasis on the spending by the government instead of the tax cut which increases extra money with only those who pay taxes.
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The answer never looked a UPSC Mains answer for paper 3. It is more like reading an editorial.
The intro is very big and it is taking one full page and the main demand of the question is met on the 2nd page of the answer.
There are virtually no subheadings which could have suggested what you are discussing.
The answer is in the style of various paragraphs.
Avoid this. Write relevant subheadings and under them, discuss your content in bullet points.
The demand of the question is not discussed in a holistic manner.
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Write points in bullet formats. This will give clarity to your answer.
Your handwriting is good. If the answer is written in bullet format, then your handwriting will complement it and your presentation will be top-notch.
Good content overall.
Your coverage is good in terms of the depth of the content.
The language and explanation is superb.
Good structure.
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Amazing presentation in the 1st part of the answer!
We suggest students to use these techniques in their answer so that they get their x-factor in their answer.
The discussion done in that flowchart is perfect and it’s to the point.
The 2nd part is also handled well.
The way forward or your conclusion could have been better in terms of explanation and the content.
The overall structure of the answer is decent but after intro do discuss the situation of the Indian economy with some facts or stats.
Overall the balance in the main body of the answer is very good.
Underline imp stuff in your answers
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The way forward or your suggestion, in the end, is missing.
Apart from that, the overall answer is good.
But do suggest a decent forward in the end before concluding your answer otherwise your answer will not stand out among the crowd despite having a good answer in the main body.
The content in the main body is decent and it is well structured.
The intro is fine.
Do underline imp stuff in your answers.
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Ther answer is weak in terms of structure and answering the demand of the question.
Also, the concluding statement is not viable for an UPSC GS Mains level. You have left the answer open-ended thereby suggesting “So govt take the appropriate measures to do that either it is tax cut or improving demand-side problems.” Even we know that the government should do this!!! But as an aspirant the UPSC is looking after your views on the issues and what do you suggest that it should do. It is just like saying in a paper 4 way forward that government should bring accountability!! We all know that government should bring accountability! But how! That is the whole point of having a subjective mains rather than objective paper, like prelims. Therefore avoid these general concluding paragraphs or way forward.
The whole answer is discussing the tax cut issue and its various dimensions while the demand side discussion is just conducted in a small frame that too without going any deep.
So the 1st part is over-discussed while the 2nd part is virtually non-existent in the answer. That affects the balance of the answer.
Your intro is decent.
Do not over-indulge in any part of the answer. Keep both parts equally important.