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- https://indianexpress.com/article/opinion/columns/qassem-soleimani-quds-iran-us-donald-trump-india-6203258/
- “In what ways would the ongoing controversy US-Iran Nuclear Pact controversy affects the national interests of India? How should India respond to this situation?” (UPSC 2018)
- In the intro, explain briefly what is unfolding in the Middle East in the aftermath of the Iranian General’s assassination by the U.S.
- In the main body explain what is at stake for India in its relations with both the countries including trade, energy, security, the Indian diaspora, and stability in the region. And also explain how the changing circumstances might force India with the unpleasant choice of choosing one of the two and how India could successfully tackle the situation.
- In the way forward suggest what could India do to diffuse the tensions between the two by acting as an intermediary.
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Combine the 1st two statements of the intro to make a unified intro. That will be a better structure for your answer.
Please underline or highlight your subheading prominently.
Your overall coverage of the answer is very good.
The points are well placed and are in-depth.
Good structure with the use of a tabular form of presentation.
But work on your presentation. Write on the UPSC answer sheets to get a better idea of space.
Very good concluding statements.
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Apart from a missing concrete point at the end of the answer, the rest of the answer is very good.
Good use of little flowcharts.
You have covered various important dimensions in the main body of your answer. Keep it up.
The concluding remarks of the answer should have some concrete steps that India should or could take to defuse the tension between Iran and the USA.
The overall structure is very good.
The language is decent and points are crisply explained.
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You missed key components like remittances, diaspora and connectivity with Iran and Diaspora and Trade Surplus with the USA while discussing the dimensions of relations of India with these countries. In terms of Iran discussion, a lot of emphasis is done on the energy issue while there are so many geopolitics also involved there.
To get an idea of more dimensions, read the answers above Abhishek and Dipanshu.
The concluding remarks are too general.
The concluding remarks of the answer should have some concrete steps that India should or could take to defuse the tension between Iran and the USA.
The intro is good and your language overall is fine.
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Give concrete statements in the conclusion, as in how India can diffuse the tensions between the two by acting as an intermediary. What steps could and should take in this regard.
The rest of the answer is decent.
The discussion in the flowchart is very good.
The main body is handled really well.
Dimensions covered in there are relevant and to the point.
The overall structure is nice and smooth.
The language is also decent.
Avoid minute cuttings and errors in your answers.
They reflect the indecisiveness on your end while thinking parts. That will be a major let down for the examiner. Therefore think properly before writing the statement. That’s extra second’s pause before writing will help you gain extra marks because your statements will be better framed and they will be clear.
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